ÜÇÜNCÜ ŞAHSIN ŞİİRİ

Gözlerin gözlerime değince
Felaketim olurdu ağlardım
Beni sevmiyordun bilirdim
Bir sevdiğin vardı duyardım
Çöp gibi bir oğlan ipince
Hayırsızın biriydi fikrimce
Ne vakit karşımda görsem
Öldüreceğimden korkardım
Felaketim olurdu ağlardım

Ne vakit Maçka´dan geçsem
Limanda hep gemiler olurdu
Ağaçlar kuş gibi gülerdi
Bir rüzgar aklımı alırdı
Sessizce bir cigara yakardın
Parmaklarımın ucunu yakardın
Kirpiklerini eğer bakardın
Üşürdüm içim ürperirdi
Felaketim olurdu ağlardım

Akşamlar bir roman gibi biterdi
Jezabel kan içinde yatardı
Limandan bir gemi giderdi
Sen kalkıp ona giderdin
Benzin mum gibi giderdin
Sabaha kadar kalırdın
Hayırsızın biriydi fikrimce
Güldümü cenazeye benzerdi
Hele seni kollarına alınca
Felaketim olurdu ağlardım

ATİLLA İLHAN (1925-2005)

POETRY third party

 When your eyes touch my eyes
 I would have been disastrous, to cry
 You did not love me, I´d know
 There was a favorite, I felt
 A spindly boy, ipince
 Scapegrace was one of the opinion
 What time I see my face
 Afraid I´d die
 I would have been disastrous, to cry

 What if time passes from Macka
 All ships in the harbor would be
 Trees would have laughed like a bird
 You have a silent prayer cigara
 You have to burn my fingertips
 Would bend eyelashes, would look
 I get cold, I would shudder
 I would have been disastrous, to cry

 Evening would end like a novel
 Jezabel blood would lie in
 It would go on a ship from port
 Did you get up and go to him
 Gasoline would go like a candle
 ´d Stay until morning
 Scapegrace was one of the opinion
 Did the roses to the funeral were similar
 Did you especially in your arms
 I would have been disastrous, to cry

Attila İlhan

POETRY third party

 When your eyes touch my eyes
 I would have been disastrous, to cry
 You did not love me, I´d know
 There was a favorite, I felt
 A spindly boy, ipince
 Scapegrace was one of the opinion
 What time I see my face
 Afraid I´d die
 I would have been disastrous, to cry

 What if time passes from Macka
 All ships in the harbor would be
 Trees would have laughed like a bird
 You have a silent prayer cigara
 You have to burn my fingertips
 Would bend eyelashes, would look
 I get cold, I would shudder
 I would have been disastrous, to cry

 Evening would end like a novel
 Jezabel blood would lie in
 It would go on a ship from port
 Did you get up and go to him
 Gasoline would go like a candle
 ´d Stay until morning
 Scapegrace was one of the opinion
 Did the roses to the funeral were similar
 Did you especially in your arms
 I would have been disastrous, to cry

Attila İlhan

What a fantastic English translation you made of this poem thehandsom 

I have copied it below, and made a few small changes to your English

I hope you don´t mind.

POEM OF THE THIRD PERSON 

Whenever your eyes met mine 
It was my tragedy, I would cry 
You never loved me, I would know 
You loved someone else, I would hear 
A slim boy, like a beanstalk 
He was unfaithful I thought 
Whenever I saw him 
I was afraid I would kill him 
It was my tragedy, I would cry 

Whenever I went through Macka 
There were always ships in the harbour 
The trees were like laughing birds 
The breeze would blow my mind away 
You would light a cigarette in silence 
You would light my fingertips 
If your eyelashes would look 
I would feel cold, my heart would tremble 
It was my tragedy, I would cry 

The nights would finish like a novel 
Jezabel would lay in blood 
A ship would depart from the dock 
You would take off to him 
You would go pale 
You would stay until the morning 
He was unfaithful I thought 
When he laughed, it was like a funeral 
Especially, when he took you in his arms 
It was my tragedy, I would cry 

Hmmm. I didn´t think about it too deeply. Now that I look at the words

benzin mum gibi - like a fuel candle? ... I´m not sure what to put.

Maybe - You would go like a candle .....

Ahhh poetry, did the poet mean she was ready to explode (with desire), or looked like a candle, waxen and without colour?

It can be interpreted many ways I guess. Getting back to your original question, I had no problems with ´you would go pale-faced´. I just thought it didn´t need the ´faced´ part, but on reflection I should have left that part alone.  

I would love thehandsom to explain his thoughts about these words.

ÜÇÜNCÜ ŞAHSIN ŞİİRİ

Gözlerin gözlerime değince
Felaketim olurdu ağlardım
Beni sevmiyordun bilirdim
Bir sevdiğin vardı duyardım
Çöp gibi bir oğlan ipince
Hayırsızın biriydi fikrimce
Ne vakit karşımda görsem
Öldüreceğimden korkardım
Felaketim olurdu ağlardım

Ne vakit Maçka´dan geçsem
Limanda hep gemiler olurdu
Ağaçlar kuş gibi gülerdi
Bir rüzgar aklımı alırdı
Sessizce bir cigara yakardın
Parmaklarımın ucunu yakardın
Kirpiklerini eğer bakardın
Üşürdüm içim ürperirdi
Felaketim olurdu ağlardım

Akşamlar bir roman gibi biterdi
Jezabel kan içinde yatardı
Limandan bir gemi giderdi
Sen kalkıp ona giderdin
Benzin mum gibi giderdin
Sabaha kadar kalırdın
Hayırsızın biriydi fikrimce
Güldümü cenazeye benzerdi
Hele seni kollarına alınca
Felaketim olurdu ağlardım

ATİLLA İLHAN (1925-2005)

POETRY third party

 When your eyes touch my eyes
 I would have been disastrous, to cry
 You did not love me, I´d know
 There was a favorite, I felt
 A spindly boy, ipince
 Scapegrace was one of the opinion
 What time I see my face
 Afraid I´d die
 I would have been disastrous, to cry

 What if time passes from Macka
 All ships in the harbor would be
 Trees would have laughed like a bird
 You have a silent prayer cigara
 You have to burn my fingertips
 Would bend eyelashes, would look
 I get cold, I would shudder
 I would have been disastrous, to cry

 Evening would end like a novel
 Jezabel blood would lie in
 It would go on a ship from port
 Did you get up and go to him
 Gasoline would go like a candle
 ´d Stay until morning
 Scapegrace was one of the opinion
 Did the roses to the funeral were similar
 Did you especially in your arms
 I would have been disastrous, to cry

Attila İlhan