General/Off-topic |
|
|
|
|
|
Hopeless Love Poems - 4
|
| 1. |
16 Apr 2007 Mon 12:09 pm |
|
without
a pen without ink
a shirt without tie
a river without bridge
a tree without brance
a bird without wing
a poem without poet
a hell without demon
a universe without god
is like I without you.
16 April'07, Sanghai
Comments of any kind are welcome.
|
|
| 2. |
16 Apr 2007 Mon 04:06 pm |
|
Nice. But I''m just curious why it's poems without poet and not a poet without poems?
|
|
| 3. |
16 Apr 2007 Mon 05:07 pm |
|
Poet without poems is not a poet... but poems without poet are like orphans... that's how I see it.
Though I would try to change "bird without wing" with something else; that comparison has been rather used in poetry - shirt without tie is, for example, much stronger thanks to its freshness. (And I like it - shirt, pen, hell: unexpectable and thus strong comparisons.)
|
|
| 4. |
16 Apr 2007 Mon 05:17 pm |
|
Oh, I can't agree with you, Duda.
I think that combination of expected and unexpected is what gives freshness to this poem.
I loved it, it is so strong in its simplicity!
You're getting better and better, Quazimodo, indeed 
|
|
| 5. |
16 Apr 2007 Mon 06:33 pm |
|
Hey, you forget I give my critics only on good poetry and good authors! And Quasimodo is always open-minded about any kind of friendly comment, not like some other people. 
Though, I liked his previous ones too, very much.
|
|
| 6. |
17 Apr 2007 Tue 06:58 am |
|
rather common
but try again
|
|
| 7. |
19 Apr 2007 Thu 12:44 am |
|
Thank you all very much for your comments. I highly appreciated them!
And now here are a few testimonials of my poem/poetry. Just for taste!
...surprising turns and twists, a new and realistic expansion in poetry. - Le Monde, 04.17.2007
Without: Even the title itself is excellent! - New York Times, 04.17.2007
Take Lermontov and Aragon, mix them up, and you are left with Quasimodo! - Times, 04.17.2007
Quasimodo's poem is a modern epic in today's poetry. - The Art and Literature, 04.18.2007
No poetry-lover could be without without - Pravda, 04.18.2007
A modern epic of love: without! Read it, and immediately fall in love! - Le Figaro, 04.18.2007
Without, without doubt, will be greeted by all poetry-lovers- The Poetry Review, 04.18.2007
|
|
| 8. |
19 Apr 2007 Thu 01:25 am |
|
yhmmmm.... are you... ok Quasimodo??? this is worrisome... :-S
|
|
| 9. |
19 Apr 2007 Thu 01:45 am |
|
Actually I was going to ask you the same question since I saw no comment from you. How come you didn't reveal or point out the sexual or pornographic content in my poem!
|
|
| 10. |
19 Apr 2007 Thu 03:23 am |
|
Quoting Quasimodo: Actually I was going to ask you the same question since I saw no comment from you. How come you didn't reveal or point out the sexual or pornographic content in my poem! |
not sexual this time, but grammatical errors... but then again, it might have been part of the 'plan', you never know with poetry  (of course only the amatourish one).
if you want to know my opinion, I didn't like this poem (I'm actually resisting to call it a poem), it's too simplistic, lacks depth. everybody can write something like this. Some of your other stuff was better .
|
|
|
