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My first Turkish poem
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06 Mar 2006 Mon 11:17 pm |
Hello everybody,
Tonight i wrote my first Turkish poem. I would like to share it with you, and i would like if some native speaker could see if it is ok and correct it where it is not.
Benim için ağla saz.
Benim gülümsemem nereye gitti?
Benim için ağla saz.
Çünkü ağlayamam, daha fazla ağlayamam.
Bir daha ağlamak istemiyorum.
Benim için ağla saz.
Benim gülümsemem nereye gitti?
Hadi benim için ağla, ağla
Çünkü gülümsemek istiyorum yine.
Benim için gülümse saz.
Çünkü gülümsemek istiyorum.
Hayır, benim için gülümseme saz
Ama..
Benimle gülümse saz
Çünkü gülümsemek istyorum.
Çünkü gülümsemem lazım
Benimle ağla saz
Benimle gülümse saz
Çünkü aşkı hissediyorum.
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This is what i tried to say:
Cry for me saz.
Where did my smile go?
Cry for me saz.
Because i cannot cry, i cannot cry anymore.
I don't want to cry anylonger.
Cry for me saz.
Where did my smile go?
Come on cry for me, cry
Because i want to smile again
Smile for me saz.
Because i want to smile.
No, don't smile for me saz.
But..
Smile wÃth me
Because i want to smile.
Because i need to smile.
Cry with me saz
Smile with me saz
Because it is love I am feeling.
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Can someone correct it where it is wrong and explain me why it is wrong?
Thanks in advance
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07 Mar 2006 Tue 12:15 am |
Correction in Turkish:
"Çünkü gülümsemeğim lazım" değil.."Çünkü gülümsemem lazım"
"Çünkü aşk hissediyorum" değil..."Çünkü aşkı hissediyorum"
Advise in philosophy:
Everyone needs a good smile now and then. The best way to get a good smile yourself is in getting others around you to smile first.
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07 Mar 2006 Tue 12:20 am |
Was that the only mistake i made?
Yeah true. But it's getting hard to smile if you learnt how to love and then suddenly you are on your own for a while again. But i gained new motivation and energy to keep on going the next 5 months till we see eachother again, so i decided i wanted to write that down in turkish
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07 Mar 2006 Tue 12:33 am |
Great!!!
I like your poem!!
I hope some day i will write a poema too.
Smile and the life will be better!!
M.T.
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07 Mar 2006 Tue 12:46 am |
I LIKE IT....!!!!1
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07 Mar 2006 Tue 01:32 am |
im impressed....
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07 Mar 2006 Tue 02:53 am |
http://www.tulumba.com/storeitem.asp?ic=MU971223VZ312
Samples (only samples) of saz music at its best.. Try the links
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07 Mar 2006 Tue 05:28 pm |
Thank you all
I'll try the links anytime soon, because i really love saz-music.
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07 Mar 2006 Tue 07:50 pm |
Wow, it's so good. You should have worked hard on it.
I would make one more correction, for a poem, it's not good to write "ya", just make it "hadi". Otherwise, it loses its emotion.
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07 Mar 2006 Tue 10:10 pm |
what a nice poem
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07 Mar 2006 Tue 11:35 pm |
Ok thank you very much, I'll modify it straight away
It actually didn't take sooo long to write it, i guess half an hour.. because i felt like some sentences had been in my mind for some time already, really weird. Just waiting for the right time to be written down.
I'm glad you liked it
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25 Apr 2006 Tue 08:19 pm |
woowww.. niceeee keep on smiling
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25 Apr 2006 Tue 08:28 pm |
Congratulations Deli_kizin for your poem and also for the courage to post it. It is really nice and I am impressed.
Sincerely
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25 Apr 2006 Tue 08:45 pm |
aw thanks for sharing that deli-kizin, thats a beautiful poem congratulations keep up the good work!
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25 Apr 2006 Tue 08:49 pm |
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25 Apr 2006 Tue 11:51 pm |
Everyone needs a good smile now and then. The best way to get a good smile yourself is in getting others around you to smile first.
evet cok gercek
smile and the world smiles with you
cry and you cry alone
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26 Apr 2006 Wed 12:31 am |
Quoting deli: Everyone needs a good smile now and then. The best way to get a good smile yourself is in getting others around you to smile first.
evet cok gercek
smile and the world smiles with you
cry and you cry alone |
Well I'm smiling again. I got my exam-results back, and i have passed the school-exams with good grades. School-exams count 50% and the final exams are the other 50%. The finals are within 3 weeks, but now that i passed the first half with good results, i'm pretty sure i'll pass.
I feel a little less tensed and better, so I'm actually smiling again Today it was so sunny here and many classes
were cancelled. I sat in the grass with a book of Yaşar Kemal and listened my music. On my way home i went into town, bought a nice summerdress and celebrated my love with an ice-cream
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13 May 2006 Sat 09:49 pm |
cok guzel tebriklerrr
harika olmus ikincisini denemelisin
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