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Hopeless Love Poems-2
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15 Mar 2007 Thu 02:28 pm |
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four season ballad
she is raining-I am getting wet
she is shining-I am sweating
she is falling-I am going naked
she is snowing-I am feeling cold
15 March'07, Paris
Comments of any kind are welcome!
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15 Mar 2007 Thu 04:23 pm |
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for some reason that poem sounds rude,soemone explain what it trying to mean after the seasons
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15 Mar 2007 Thu 06:00 pm |
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Quoting melnceyhun: for some reason that poem sounds rude,soemone explain what it trying to mean after the seasons |
I agree. I think that he wanted to play with words while giving them sexual meanings (the play part probably so that he can argue that it's not sexual). If the sexual messages weren't so rude, it would be a sweet little poem. In most of his writings though he expresses his sexual anxieties and with varying degrees - his condescending attitude towards others.
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 12:28 am |
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Thank you for your kind(!) comments.
nautilis- you got the point. I am indeed obbsessed by her, about which I have no complaint. So, I am actually the one who should be left free.
melnceyhun- I am sorry but I must disagree with you. From where and how have you come to a conclusion that my poem sounds rude? It can sound anything but rude. And I won't mention I am exalting her in my above poem.
Andddd catwoman (hehe!)- I would have been surprised if you hadn't found my poem sexist! So, I try to hide sexual meanings by playing with words, eh? You made me laugh out loud here. And what should it be said about I express my sexual anxieties? I assure you sexuality would be the last point that might have come to my mind when writing my poem. But, while on the subject, I think, I'd better to announce that I write also erotic poems- the poems that look like what you saw in my above one. They are currently on their way and you will soon attain the honour to read them.
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 12:32 am |
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 12:41 am |
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Quoting Quasimodo:
15 March'07, Paris
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you are not in paris, are you? 
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 12:42 am |
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Quoting vineyards: Quote:
Comments of any kind are welcome! |
Comments of any kind are more welcome than your poem.
P.S. removing "Love" from the title will do more justice to your poetry. |
Thank you for your kind comment, demon of the void! You seem to understand, as expected, neither poetry nor the word "love". I wonder what you were taught when studying English Language and Literature.
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 12:46 am |
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Quoting SuiGeneris: Quoting Quasimodo:
15 March'07, Paris
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you are not in paris, are you? |
Ask that question the demon of the void! Since he is expert in poetry, I guess he should be capable of telling if writing "Paris" under the poem reflects the reality or not! I am sorry I cannot say something of whether I was really in Paris or not.
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 12:48 am |
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Quoting Quasimodo: Quoting SuiGeneris: Quoting Quasimodo:
15 March'07, Paris
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you are not in paris, are you? |
Ask that question the demon of the void! Since he is expert in poetry, I guess he should be capable of telling if writing "Paris" under the poem reflects the reality or not! I am sorry I cannot say something of whether I was really in Paris or not.
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nevermind! i was just in a worry for people in Paris, since i got your answer, i think they are safe
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 12:56 am |
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Quoting SuiGeneris: Quoting Quasimodo: Quoting SuiGeneris: Quoting Quasimodo:
15 March'07, Paris
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you are not in paris, are you? |
Ask that question the demon of the void! Since he is expert in poetry, I guess he should be capable of telling if writing "Paris" under the poem reflects the reality or not! I am sorry I cannot say something of whether I was really in Paris or not.
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nevermind! i was just in a worry for people in Paris, since i got your answer, i think they are safe |
Don't be sure that much till reading what the demon of the void, as an expert in the subject, say about it. Since he is expert, he can parse anything in or related to the poem!
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 01:13 am |
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Quoting Quasimodo: Quoting SuiGeneris: Quoting Quasimodo:
15 March'07, Paris |
you are not in paris, are you? |
Ask that question the demon of the void! Since he is expert in poetry, I guess he should be capable of telling if writing "Paris" under the poem reflects the reality or not! I am sorry I cannot say something of whether I was really in Paris or not.
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why are you getting so defensive cyrano? you asked for comments, or did you mean compliments? every poet has to be able to tolerate criticism and hopefully learn from it, but you instead try to prove everyone wrong who doesn't like your poems! come on... decide what you want.
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 01:14 am |
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You missed wind... for example:
she is raining-I am getting wet
she is shining-I am sweating
she is blowing-I am going naked
she is snowing-I am feeling cold
Or whatever...
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 01:48 am |
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Quoting catwoman:
why are you getting so defensive cyrano? you asked for comments, or did you mean compliments? every poet has to be able to tolerate criticism and hopefully learn from it, but you instead try to prove everyone wrong who doesn't like your poems! come on... decide what you want. |
Hey- but I thanked each of you for your comments, didn't I? And I wrote my opinions on your comments- that's all! And I don't seek to receive nice always comments or compliments. That's why at the outset I said comments of any kind are welcome.
Thank you again.
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 01:52 am |
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Quoting duda: You missed wind... for example:
she is blowing-I am going naked
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Hmmm.. I am not sure... But consider a tree goes naked when its leaves fall in the autumn. However, let's wait and see what the demon of the void, the expert of the subject, will say!
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 03:19 am |
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Or a beggar with only a few garments... Or something like this:
Blow, Bugle, blow
THE splendour falls on castle walls
And snowy summits old in story:
The long light shakes across the lakes,
And the wild cataract leaps in glory.
Blow, bugle, blow, set the wild echoes flying,
Blow, bugle; answer, echoes, dying, dying, dying.
O hark, O hear! how thin and clear,
And thinner, clearer, farther going!
O sweet and far from cliff and scar
The horns of Elfland faintly blowing!
Blow, let us hear the purple glens replying:
Blow, bugle; answer, echoes, dying, dying, dying.
O love, they die in yon rich sky,
They faint on hill or field or river:
Our echoes roll from soul to soul,
And grow for ever and for ever.
Blow, bugle, blow, set the wild echoes flying,
And answer, echoes, answer, dying, dying, dying.
Alfred, Lord Tennyson
Anyway, nothing like what girls maybe thought.
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 04:15 am |
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It is all nice but are you sure it is, whether hopeless or hopeful, a love poem?
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 06:57 pm |
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Love is hopeless... poems are hope itself.
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 06:58 pm |
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Quoting duda: Love is hopeless... poems are hope itself. |
very beautifully and poetically put 
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 07:01 pm |
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 08:16 pm |
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Quoting robyn :
very beautifully and poetically put |
So, robyn, won't you comment on my poem? Just confess you like it very much, no?
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 10:08 pm |
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Quoting Quasimodo: Quoting robyn :
very beautifully and poetically put |
So, robyn, won't you comment on my poem? Just confess you like it very much, no?
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erm... no  but it's very succinct.bravo 
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 10:35 pm |
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Confess it, Robyn. You like it very much. Don't fear, Robyn, just confess it like you make confessions to a father in a church. Don't ever fear! Take me as your father!
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 10:39 pm |
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Quoting Quasimodo:
Confess it, Robyn. You like it very much. Don't fear, Robyn, just confess it like you make confessions to a father in a church. Don't ever fear! Take me as your father!
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yes u've got me,it was the best poem i've ever read in my life
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 10:44 pm |
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Quoting robyn : Quoting Quasimodo:
Confess it, Robyn. You like it very much. Don't fear, Robyn, just confess it like you make confessions to a father in a church. Don't ever fear! Take me as your father!
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yes u've got me,it was the best poem i've ever read in my life |
Good girl, Robyn! One of your sins is about to be forgiven. To make it totally forgive, you should also go to a church and make the confession to the father that you avoided at first confessing you like my poem very much and ask him to forgive you. Sorry I have no authority, since I am no father, to do it.
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 10:47 pm |
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Quoting Quasimodo:
Good girl, Robyn! One of your sins is about to be forgiven. To make it totally forgive, you should also go to a church and make the confession to the father that you avoided at first confessing you like my poem very much and ask him to forgive you. Sorry I have no authority, since I am no father, to do it.
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seeing as god knows all and im not catholic i guess theres no need huh?
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16 Mar 2007 Fri 11:27 pm |
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But I am a Catholic and you, according to my belief, should go to a church and confess it as you committed a sin against me who am a Catholic. I am sorry for such inconvenience, but you shouldn't have involved in this thread!
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17 Mar 2007 Sat 01:42 am |
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Quoting Quasimodo: But I am a Catholic and you, according to my belief, should go to a church and confess it as you committed a sin against me who am a Catholic. I am sorry for such inconvenience, but you shouldn't have involved in this thread! |
and im sorry but i shant comform to your ideals. they are yours and not mine
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17 Mar 2007 Sat 05:28 pm |
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Actually, I think "Hopeless" just about sums it up!! 
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17 Mar 2007 Sat 06:14 pm |
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Quoting libralady: Actually, I think "Hopeless" just about sums it up!! |
Uhmm... I would prefer to wait and see the demond of the void's approach to the function of "Hopeless" there since it is he who is the only expert of poetry around here and thus capable of indicating the function of it.
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18 Mar 2007 Sun 03:10 pm |
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Quoting Quasimodo: Quoting libralady: Actually, I think "Hopeless" just about sums it up!! |
Uhmm... I would prefer to wait and see the demond of the void's approach to the function of "Hopeless" there since it is he who is the only expert of poetry around here and thus capable of indicating the function of it.
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lost, forlorn, having no hope.................... courtesy the English dictionary
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18 Mar 2007 Sun 06:47 pm |
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Quoting libralady: Quoting Quasimodo: Quoting libralady: Actually, I think "Hopeless" just about sums it up!! |
Uhmm... I would prefer to wait and see the demond of the void's approach to the function of "Hopeless" there since it is he who is the only expert of poetry around here and thus capable of indicating the function of it.
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lost, forlorn, having no hope.................... courtesy the English dictionary |
No doubt, it refers to them. But you know mostly dictionaries follow authors and poets like me, not vice versa! Hehe! Here is a pleasant aspect of being a poet!
Ehi!
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18 Mar 2007 Sun 08:17 pm |
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Quoting Quasimodo: four season ballad
she is raining-I am getting wet
she is shining-I am sweating
she is falling-I am going naked
she is snowing-I am feeling cold
15 March'07, Paris
Comments of any kind are welcome! |
i didnt find ur poem rude,cause it just expression of feelings but i understand why ppl here see sexual conotation,but sexual feelings are part of love too..who doesnt have them!
reading first time this poem i just saw pictures like in some neonadrealism movie,it is simple poem and u can undestand her in diffrent meanings..but thats why art,poetry exist!
bonne nuit a Paris
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18 Mar 2007 Sun 08:40 pm |
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Quoting Quasimodo: Thank you for your kind(!) comments.
nautilis- you got the point. I am indeed obbsessed by her, about which I have no complaint. So, I am actually the one who should be left free.
melnceyhun- I am sorry but I must disagree with you. From where and how have you come to a conclusion that my poem sounds rude? It can sound anything but rude. And I won't mention I am exalting her in my above poem.
Andddd catwoman (hehe!)- I would have been surprised if you hadn't found my poem sexist! So, I try to hide sexual meanings by playing with words, eh? You made me laugh out loud here. And what should it be said about I express my sexual anxieties? I assure you sexuality would be the last point that might have come to my mind when writing my poem. But, while on the subject, I think, I'd better to announce that I write also erotic poems- the poems that look like what you saw in my above one. They are currently on their way and you will soon attain the honour to read them.
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18 Mar 2007 Sun 09:56 pm |
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Quoting lunila:
i didnt find ur poem rude,cause it just expression of feelings but i understand why ppl here see sexual conotation,but sexual feelings are part of love too..who doesnt have them!
reading first time this poem i just saw pictures like in some neonadrealism movie,it is simple poem and u can undestand her in diffrent meanings..but thats why art,poetry exist!
bonne nuit a Paris |
lunila - I do like your approach to poetry so much. I can't do more than to agree with what you told about poetry. It appears we have the same view and taste concerning poetry. And you seems to be the girl for whom I have been looking for ages. Marry me?
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18 Mar 2007 Sun 10:04 pm |
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Quoting melnceyhun:
ow well, it sounded like that to me, but i didnt quite understood the poem, sorry |
What? You didn't quite understand my poem? What do you mean? That in my poetry I use an unintelligible and excessive language? The language that very few could understand? No, my friend, in my poetry I do use a Liverpoolian dock worker's language, a Londonian waitress' language, a Chicagoian taxi driver's language, a New Yorkian prostitute's language; in short, I use the people's language, the real English.
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18 Mar 2007 Sun 10:38 pm |
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Quoting Quasimodo: Quoting lunila:
i didnt find ur poem rude,cause it just expression of feelings but i understand why ppl here see sexual conotation,but sexual feelings are part of love too..who doesnt have them!
reading first time this poem i just saw pictures like in some neonadrealism movie,it is simple poem and u can undestand her in diffrent meanings..but thats why art,poetry exist!
bonne nuit a Paris |
lunila - I do like your approach to poetry so much. I can't do more than to agree with what you told about poetry. It appears we have the same view and taste concerning poetry. And you seems to be the girl for whom I have been looking for ages. Marry me? |
yeah..marrie u?u still didnt bought me with ur poetry!show me more 
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18 Mar 2007 Sun 11:41 pm |
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Quoting lunila:
yeah..marrie u?u still didnt bought me with ur poetry!show me more |
But...but... you already took me with your approach to poetry! I think we both have looked for each other, and now, thanks God, found each other. Let's marry, lunila! This is my first proposal to you. Please be adviced that there are so many girls, at that very beautiful girls, at this site from all over the world who have a call to marry me; but for some reason I chose you!
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19 Mar 2007 Mon 12:22 am |
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Quoting Quasimodo: Quoting lunila:
yeah..marrie u?u still didnt bought me with ur poetry!show me more |
But...but... you already took me with your approach to poetry! I think we both have looked for each other, and now, thanks God, found each other. Let's marry, lunila! This is my first proposal to you. Please be adviced that there are so many girls, at that very beautiful girls, at this site from all over the world who have a call to marry me; but for some reason I chose you! |
yeah..a quasimodo look guy..no way i am not esmeralda liking ur poetry doesnt means i like u so this is ur first proparsal,how manny u will give them to me??
show us more of ur poems
kendine iyi bak 
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19 Mar 2007 Mon 01:10 am |
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Quoting lunila: how manny u will give them to me??
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Till you accept my proposal! and here is the second one:
Would you like to marry me?
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19 Mar 2007 Mon 02:32 am |
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'she' is the weather, the season. 'I' am the earth: the flower, the humidity rising, the tree, etc. I dont find any sexual connotation in the poem as the title justifies what it is about. it would be up to the person reading to decide if it is sexual or not. peace
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19 Mar 2007 Mon 03:31 am |
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Quoting Quasimodo: Quoting lunila: how manny u will give them to me??
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Till you accept my proposal! and here is the second one:
Would you like to marry me? |
this one was second!i ll see how truthfull u r! but i think iam not the only one who likes ur poem,here is teresajane and now we will see will u give propsal to her
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19 Mar 2007 Mon 04:43 am |
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Quoting TeresaJana: 'she' is the weather, the season. 'I' am the earth: the flower, the humidity rising, the tree, etc. I dont find any sexual connotation in the poem as the title justifies what it is about. it would be up to the person reading to decide if it is sexual or not. peace |
Thank you very much, TeresaJana, for your nice and kind words. I appreciate them much. It is nice to see people around who know about poetry enough.
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19 Mar 2007 Mon 04:49 am |
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Quoting lunila:
this one was second!i ll see how truthfull u r! but i think iam not the only one who likes ur poem,here is teresajane and now we will see will u give propsal to her
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lunila - please believe me, you are the only one with whom I am about to fall in love, and the luckiest girl since I chose you. There are so many girls, even women, at this site who are in love with me but I chose only you. Only you, lunila! So, let's marry!
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19 Mar 2007 Mon 04:50 am |
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Quoting Quasimodo: Please be adviced that there are so many girls, at that very beautiful girls, at this site from all over the world who have a call to marry me; but for some reason I chose you! |
there are many good looking men around as well, they seem to be ahead of you in the game .
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19 Mar 2007 Mon 05:07 am |
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Quoting catwoman: Quoting Quasimodo: Please be adviced that there are so many girls, at that very beautiful girls, at this site from all over the world who have a call to marry me; but for some reason I chose you! |
there are many good looking men around as well, they seem to be ahead of you in the game .
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But...but... who said I am handsome? I just said so many girls, even women, have a call to marry me! Whether the girls and the women should have a call to marry an ugly boy like me or a handsome boy, is totally their own problem!
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19 Mar 2007 Mon 02:30 pm |
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Quoting Quasimodo: Quoting catwoman: Quoting Quasimodo: Please be adviced that there are so many girls, at that very beautiful girls, at this site from all over the world who have a call to marry me; but for some reason I chose you! |
there are many good looking men around as well, they seem to be ahead of you in the game .
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But...but... who said I am handsome? I just said so many girls, even women, have a call to marry me! Whether the girls and the women should have a call to marry an ugly boy like me or a handsome boy, is totally their own problem!
u chose me!oh..i feel so honoured but  and i cant stop running around the lake and fighting with this fog oh..i cant breath anymore but i dont see new poem under the stone..oh quasimodo iam disapoinnted  |
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19 Mar 2007 Mon 03:23 pm |
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Why are you impatient, lunila? We have just met each other and started to our relationship. (Which means that I will write to you tons of love poems more).
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19 Mar 2007 Mon 03:38 pm |
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Quoting Quasimodo: Why are you impatient, lunila? We have just met each other and started to our relationship. (Which means that I will write to you tons of love poems more). |
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19 Mar 2007 Mon 03:38 pm |
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Quoting lunila: Quoting Quasimodo: Why are you impatient, lunila? We have just met each other and started to our relationship. (Which means that I will write to you tons of love poems more). |
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19 Mar 2007 Mon 03:38 pm |
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Quoting lunila: Quoting lunila: Quoting Quasimodo: Why are you impatient, lunila? We have just met each other and started to our relationship. (Which means that I will write to you tons of love poems more). |
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19 Mar 2007 Mon 03:42 pm |
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Quoting lunila: Quoting lunila: Quoting lunila: Quoting Quasimodo: Why are you impatient, lunila? We have just met each other and started to our relationship. (Which means that I will write to you tons of love poems more). |
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u will write all those poems for me!!!!AWWWAA!
Apsint really works for ur inspiration!
19.03.07
Paris Saint Germain a cote De nOTRE Damme
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19 Mar 2007 Mon 06:56 pm |
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Quoting lunila: Quoting lunila: Quoting lunila: Quoting Quasimodo: Why are you impatient, lunila? We have just met each other and started to our relationship. (Which means that I will write to you tons of love poems more). |
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Lunila for your poems collections, bravo
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19 Mar 2007 Mon 09:43 pm |
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My love - are you trying to figure out how quoting works by quoting three times one after another?
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20 Mar 2007 Tue 12:05 am |
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Quoting Quasimodo: My love - are you trying to figure out how quoting works by quoting three times one after another? |
luniet
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20 Mar 2007 Tue 12:10 am |
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What or who is this luniet?
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20 Mar 2007 Tue 12:16 am |
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Quoting Quasimodo: What or who is this luniet? |
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20 Mar 2007 Tue 12:21 am |
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Oh, thanks. I get it now. But...but.. you have decieved me, lunila!
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20 Mar 2007 Tue 12:24 am |
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Quoting Quasimodo: Oh, thanks. I get it now. But...but.. you have decieved me, lunila! |
what should i do now..iam desperate..i will trhrow myself down into Seine
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20 Mar 2007 Tue 12:25 am |
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Quoting lunila: Quoting Quasimodo: Oh, thanks. I get it now. But...but.. you have decieved me, lunila! |
what should i do now..iam desperate..i will trhrow myself down into Seine |
thats a long way from moscow dear sis 
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20 Mar 2007 Tue 12:30 am |
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Quoting robyn : Quoting lunila: Quoting Quasimodo: Oh, thanks. I get it now. But...but.. you have decieved me, lunila! |
what should i do now..iam desperate..i will trhrow myself down into Seine |
thats a long way from moscow dear sis |
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20 Mar 2007 Tue 12:31 am |
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Quote: Quoting lunila:
thats a long way from moscow dear sis |
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bless you dear sis
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20 Mar 2007 Tue 12:38 am |
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Girls- I am getting tired of trying to catch you! Phew! I cannot write so fast and so much! I tend to give up for now... Let me break for a while!
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20 Mar 2007 Tue 12:42 am |
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Quoting Quasimodo: Girls- I am getting tired of trying to catch you! Phew! I cannot write so fast and so much! I tend to give up for now... Let me break for a while! |
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