İri kıyım barmen ikisini birden şöyle bir süzdü, abartılı bir edayla gözlerini duvardaki saatten yana devirip, son müşterilerini yaka paça dışarı atmasına ramak kaldığını ayan eden asabi bir bakışla tekrar onlara döndü. Doğrusu son birkaç saat içinde adamın hali tavrı muazzam bir değişime uğramıştı. Bir ara oldukça kibar bir barmen olduğu söylenebilirdi, özellikle ilk başlarda, hatta sonraki dört saat boyunca dahi genellikle nazikti. Ama ardından nezaketi gözle görülür biçimde ve süratle erimeye başlamıştı. Son yirmi dakikadır “nazik” hariç her türlü sıfatı kullanmak mümkündü hakkında. (Elif Şafak, Araf)

The tall barman suddenly looked at them both, cast his eyes with an exaggerated gesture aside from the clock on the wall and with a nervous glance which made it clear that he was close to throwing the last customers out by force turned back to them. To be honest, during the last few hours the man’s behaviour had gone through a big change. For a while it could be said that he was a relatively sophisticated barman, especially in the beginning, and even for the last four hours he was usually polite. But finally his consideration began to meld in a manner and speed that was visible to eyes. In the last twenty minutes it was possible to use any other type of adjective about him except “polite”.

Please find my attempt below (any correction is welcomed) 

The tall (huge) barman suddenly looked (glanced) at them both (with disdain), cast(ed) his eyes with an exaggerated gesture aside from to the clock on the wall, and (then glanced back at them) with a nervous glance which made it clear that he was (now so) close to throwing the last customers out by force turned back to them. To be honest, during the last few hours the man’s behaviour had gone through a big change. For a while it could be said that he was (a gentleman / a refined barman) relatively sophisticated barman, especially in the beginning, and even for the last (first) four hours he was usually polite. But finally (then) his consideration (politeness)began to melt (away) in a manner and speed that was visible to eyes. In the last twenty minutes it was possible to use any other type of adjective about him except “polite”.

I borrowed this novel to read and enjoy but it´s so difficult language that what I am doing is far from reading and enjoying. I have to unlay the sentences brick by brick. But it must be useful in the end. Scalpel, thank you for your kind help. Good to see I wasn´t too much lost.

 is it my eyes or I keep seeing blank pages today ? Abla , could you try to post it again ? I think there is something wrong with sending posts to forum today..

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I´m not sure if all my posts are visible. My operator hates me. I guess they sold me this connection only to keep an eye on me through the computer screen. Most of the time it seems that I bought nothing.

In case my previous message was blank I try to remember what I said. First of all I thanked scalpel for volunteering. Probably I also told I am not looking for a perfect English translation, I am just trying to understand a text which is ultimately difficult for a learner in my level.

Here is another piece.

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“Yeterince özetlemedin mi? Beş saat oldu yahu. Hadi yürü, yaylan,” diye homurdandı kısa boylu olan. Adı Abed’di. İngilizcesi varla yok arasında pervasızca savrulan istikrarsız, koyu bir gırtlak aksanıyla maluldü. Kah sırra kadem basıp tamamen kaybolan, kah her heceden fırlayan bir tutarsız aksan.

“Hadi artık kapatacaklar burayı.” Gergin, kaçamak bakışlarla etrafı süzen Abed bir yandan arkadaşını dürtüklerken bir yandan da garsonla göz göze gelmemeye çalışsa da pek başarılı olamadı. Ayyaşın yanında ayık olmak kadar bezdirici bir şey olmadığı sonucuna varmıştı. Ne de olsa ayyaşların sabaha her birini unutacakları envai çeşit saçmalığı yapmaya hakkı vardı, halbuki ayıkların, dahil olmadıkları halde dişinda kalamadıkları bu maskaralığı ıstırapla seyretmekten başka çareleri yoktu.

”Did you summarize enough? It has been five hours. Let’s move,” mumbled the short one. His name was Abed. His English was invalid with an unstable, thick throat accent which was daringly hurled somewhere between existing and not existing. An accent, which sometimes vanished in thin air and disappeared completely, sometimes unlogically jumped out from every syllable.

“Let’s go, they are going to close this place now.” Abed  was studying the environment with a tense, elusive look. He tried to avoid meeting the waiter eye to eye from one side while pushing his friend from the other side, but couldn’t succeed in this very well. He came to the result that there was nothing as boring as being sober next to a drunkard. Whatever it was, until morning drunkards had the right to make up the type of nonsense that they would have forgotten every one, whereas the sober ones didn’t have any other chance but to look at this clowning with pain. Even though they were not in it they couldn’t stay out of it.

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I was wondering if it´s too bold to rise this up. (It has been for a while.)

Sorry if it has been ignored by TC folks ...How dare they forget your Attempt Abla

Neyse, Şaka bir yana, It seems quite successful translation to me. I can say 93 percent correct. There need small corrections only.. Considering the difficulty of the turkish text ,it is good job.

Beş saat oldu yahu !

It has been five hours.

Yahu is like  For God´s sake !

it has been five hours , For God´s sake !

Hadi yürü, yaylan ---> Come on, Off you go, get moving !

Let’s move

Your is correct too..